Poem One: Astronomy – The Moon’s Lament

I promised you poetry, did I not? I offer you the first (and one of the more poorly executed) of my poems from this past semester’s class. I’m still uncertain if I’ve gotten rid of all the abstractions. It doesn’t quite feel right, powerful enough, to me yet. I will keep working on it, of course – but here it is as I turned it in at the end of my poetry class. It’s been through several rounds of edits and critiques, so it’s at least half-decent, if not quite there yet.

She the North Star, I the Moon.

She burns, ever unmoving,
ever looked-to for guidance, for the highest example
of what is most important—a climbing—to be more.
Ever exploding outward,
ever held together by sheer force
of will.

She is always above and looking down, she is always white light

She is small, maybe, yet bright enough to be seen
across the mass of mediocrity—
across the trying and the failing of lesser stars.
Never missing, never missed.

Galaxies spin around her, turning,
held in place by her magnetism,
her gravity,
her triumphs, falling
thick and fast, one after another,
poetic, unbending.
Words to break
a jaw.

Her road is straight, her path is set, her light her own, never borrowed—
or lent.

She is.

And I?
I merely chase the sun.

even Polaris disappears,
if one travels far
enough in one


5 Comments Add yours

  1. mariertps says:

    Once again, jealousy because I never learned to write poetry. xD And awe cause it is beautiful.


    1. AnnaEstelle says:

      I suggest The Making of a Poem, edited by Mark Strand and Eavan Boland, and Poetry As Survival, by Gregory Orr. Both phenomenal. Orr’s work talks about lyric poetry – where it comes from, what we need to do to find it and write it. It’s a beautiful read as well – some of the best, most beautiful prose I’ve read in a long time. =) If you want to write poetry that isn’t necessarily in a form (so, free-verse), Orr’s ideas on lyric poetry are helpful. The Making of a Poem is an anthology – it is divided into sections based on type or form of poem (so Sestinas, Pantoums, Villanelles, Blank Verse, Stanzas, Sonnets, etc, and then some sections on metered poetry and free-verse, that don’t really have rigid forms). It begins each section with a short history of the form and a description of it and how it is written – which is super helpful if you want to try writing in one of those forms. Then it has a bunch of poems written in that form as examples, from all timeperiods. It’s really interesting, and so neat to see how each author takes the form and makes it their own. If you want to try writing form poetry, I highly suggest that book as a jumping-off place. It’ll teach you enough to get started. =) I suggest you check both the books out, if you really are interested. =)It is possible to teach oneself poetry, with a little help. The main thing is to just jump in and try it. I’m totally willing to look at poetry and offer suggestions. =)


      1. mariertps says:

        Annnnnnnnd wowzers. I should check these out soon as I get access to a good library. xD Thanks tons, Pineapple… as soon as I find the courage to post poems, I shall. (And seek advice as well)


        1. AnnaEstelle says:

          ^^You. Winning.



Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )


Connecting to %s